White Destiny [Chapter 5 revision]

The latest revision of chapter 5, White Destiny novel project, is available here:


For newcomers to the novel, you can find all the information about White Destiny here or by searching the tag “White Destiny”.

The story after chapter 3 has been rewritten; more concise, more detailed and most importantly, more logical than before:

After Father Felacia met the Witch and was hinted dead in chapter 3, the story progressed as follow: 1) the Priestess recruited the Militia, 2) the Priestess and the Militia joined force with the Baron, 3) the party went to Brown’s Boulder tavern and met the Inventor, 4) the party met the Scholar and the Witch upstairs, 5) the Horseman of Death appeared and massacred everything downstairs, 6) the party fought the Horseman, and 7) the party faced the Archbishop.

In 2015 revision; Chapter 4 covers 1) and 2). Chapter 5 covers 3) and 4). Chapter 6 covers 5). And finally, chapter 7 covers 6) and 7).

In the latest revision; Chapter 4 now covers 1), 2) and 3). Chapter 5 covers 4) and 5). Chapter 6 is now dedicated to 6) and 7). Chapter 7 will cover parts not included in 2015 revision. A few notable elements in 2015 version that either didn’t make the cut or were drastically altered in the latest revisions are:

[1] The Archbishop’s letter to the Baron

[2] The Archbishop’s influence in Ironheart

[3] The golden liquid/truth serum


The Archbishop’s letter was originally intended to convey the Archbishop’s prophecy to the Baron and the Inventor so that they could take actions to evacuate the Witch from Ironheart. The key idea was to provide a sense of haste and action in the escape scene. However, when I realize the appearance of Death in Ironheart (according to the plot) basically requires the escape plan to fail miserably. The whole scenario lost its charm at this point as no one likes railroading the plot.

So, in the latest revision, I merely made it so that the prophecy never made it to Ironheart in time. Of course, to keep things relevant, I will now have to set up so that the cast can learn about the prophecy in chapter 1 at a later date. Luckily, there’s a bunch of fishermen in Merlock who knew about the prophecy and as much of the Scholar’s story arc is in Merlock everything seems to work out better in this direction.


In regard to the Archbishop’s influence in the region, I have two options in mind for Ashlora. I can either make Ashlora a land of many nations or a country of many cities. The former idea sets the whole novel on a grander scale; which fits the epic vision of White Destiny. In order for it to make senses, I need more than one monarch and turn each of the cities into its own independent nation, a “city-state” in other words.

So for Ironheart, it’s a monarchy state with quite a complicate reign. The Baron is the de jure ruler since there is no legitimate heir from Silverflow royal family. Instead of exercising his absolute monarchy, the Baron allowed a constitutional body to act upon his behalf; this constitutional body is the Silverflow Council.

For Azeth, the situation is reversed. Azeth is originally a constitutional state with the Common’s Hall electorates acting as the highest decision-making body. But situations described in chapter 1 has led to the Archbishop holding the de facto monarch power.

So what does this have to do with the story? Well, the fact that Ironheart is an independent nation instead of a vassal territory to Azeth allows the Baron to act upon his own belief more than before. The only influence the Archbishop could exercise in Ironheart was upon the Holy Church and religious matters. He no longer has the right to siege the city or Silverflow Academy. This new setting gives the Baron causus belli when the Archbishop invaded Ironheart.


Truth Serum is, honestly, the worst plot device an author can use to easily band the characters together. It was useful in the original game, sure that, but I don’t need this uninteresting easy-way-out. Truthfulness and Trust should be earned via actions taken by the characters and not via some mystical potions which can reveal who’s lying and who’s not. That’s why in the new revision, instead of the golden liquid, I have the whole confession scene by the Witch in chapter 5, which ended with a cliff-hanger pointing to how hard-earned trust is in White Destiny.

Actually, Truth Serum is still in the story but it won’t be used so carelessly like before. The whole idea of the Illuminati was built around the serum and *spoiler* it has lots to do with the Scholar’s story arc as well. More on that in later chapters.


For now, I have no concrete idea which direction chapter 6 would take. I know for sure that it’ll cover the battle against the Horseman of Death. However, the outcome isn’t determined until I have exhausted all possibilities. Then, I can select the most logical course of actions the characters would take. Yes, White Destiny is no longer railroaded. It’s all character-driven now and it comes with a cost (or bonus, depend on the perspective): even I, the author, won’t know what will happen next!

Excited? Sure, me too!

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